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doc/manual/source/release-notes-determinate/changes.md

@@ -22,12 +22,12 @@ This section lists the differences between upstream Nix 2.28 and Determinate Nix
 
 <!-- Determinate Nix version 3.5.1 -->
 
-* Deprecate upgrade-nix command by @gustavderdrache in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#55](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/55)
+* Deprecate upgrade-nix command in favor of `determinate-nixd upgrade`, by @gustavderdrache in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#55](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/55)
 
 * Lazy trees v2 by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#27](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/27)
 
 * Improve lazy trees backward compatibility by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#56](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/56)
 
 * Canonicalize flake input URLs before checking flake.lock file staleness, for dealing with `dir` in URL-style flakerefs by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#57](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/57)
 
-* Improve build failure error messages by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#58](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/58)
+* Improved the build failure and dependency failure error messages to include output paths, by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#58](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/58)

doc/manual/source/release-notes-determinate/rl-3.5.1.md

@@ -3,8 +3,7 @@
 * Based on [upstream Nix 2.28.3](../release-notes/rl-2.28.md).
 
 ## What's Changed
-* Deprecate upgrade-nix command by @gustavderdrache in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#55](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/55)
-* Update flake.lock in light of recent change by @lucperkins in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#54](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/54)
+* Deprecate upgrade-nix command in favor of `determinate-nixd upgrade`, by @gustavderdrache in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#55](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/55)
 * Lazy trees v2 by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#27](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/27)
 * Improve lazy trees backward compatibility by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#56](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/56)
 * Canonicalize flake input URLs before checking flake.lock file staleness, for dealing with `dir` in URL-style flakerefs by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#57](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/57)