Add story intro, adjust wording in followup

Author: qdot

docs/you-your-butt-internet-buttplugs-and-you.org

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+** Wants and Needs
+Before we jump into all of the descriptions and eccentricities and
+whatnot that make up Buttplug, let's start with a parable.
+
+Have you ever bought a new thing you've been really excited about, but
+then it turns out that it didn't work as expected for you?
+
+Maybe used some software or played a game that almost gets there but
+doesn't quite work for you?
+
+Here's a story from my days as a virtual world developer, about what
+this situation looks like from the designer's side.
+
 ** I Want To Be A Shirt
 "I want to be a shirt."
 
 "A what?"
 
 "A shirt."
 
-"Like, you want a shirt with a picture of you on it or something? You can already do that you know."
+"Like, you want a shirt with a picture of you on it or something? You
+can already do that you know."
 
-"No. I want to /be/ a shirt. I want to exist as the piece of clothing. That piece of clothing should be a shirt. I get off on the idea of being a shirt. It has been a dream of mine and we're here for dreams, right?"
+"No. I want to /be/ a shirt. I want to exist as the piece of clothing.
+That piece of clothing should be a shirt. I get off on the idea of
+being a shirt. It has been a dream of mine and we're here for dreams,
+right?"
 
-Having just spend a non-trivial amount of time lovingly crafting a new type of genitals, with all sorts of bits and bobs and extras, the last thing you want to hear is that your creation is not appreciated. Building something like this that does everything it's supposed to AND communicates across multiple dimensions is not easy, and yet, according to this critic, it has completely missed the mark.
+Having just spend a non-trivial amount of time lovingly crafting a new
+type of genitals, with all sorts of bits and bobs and extras, the last
+thing you want to hear is that your creation is not appreciated.
+Building something like this that does everything it's supposed to AND
+communicates across multiple dimensions is not easy, and yet,
+according to this critic, it has completely missed the mark.
 
-"Why do you want to be a shirt? How would this be better than having some new genitalia? Look, it even vibrates when you poke it like this!"
+"Why do you want to be a shirt? How would this be better than having
+some new genitalia? Look, it even vibrates when you poke it like
+this!"
 
-"Well, yes. That's very good. It even goes all red and bulgy, a nice touch. But... I don't know. It's just always been a thing I've wanted to be. I would much rather fulfill my needs via being a shirt, than to graft on some new body part I'm not even sure I'd be in to."
+"Well, yes. That's very good. It even goes all red and bulgy, a nice
+touch. But... I don't know. It's just always been a thing I've wanted
+to be. I would much rather fulfill my needs via being a shirt, than to
+graft on some new body part I'm not even sure I'd be in to."
 
 "And you want people to wear you?"
 
 "That'd be the idea, yes."
 
-Damnit. Damn. It. Everyone was supposed to want one of these new body parts, what with the sounds and the arousals and the thrustings and the juices. Sure the inter-dimensional communication part would be a tough sell due to the learning curve, but once everyone caught on, it'd be a new paradise.
+Damnit. Damn. It. Everyone was supposed to want one of these new body
+parts, what with the sounds and the arousals and the thrustings and
+the juices. Sure the inter-dimensional communication part would be a
+tough sell due to the learning curve, but once everyone caught on,
+it'd be a new paradise.
 
-That was the plan, and it'd be awesome, and popular, and there would be much rejoicing. Yet, here we are.
+That was the plan, and it'd be awesome, and popular, and there would
+be much rejoicing. Yet, here we are.
 
 "But you can't be a shirt."
 
@@ -46,35 +78,51 @@ That was the plan, and it'd be awesome, and popular, and there would be much rej
 
 "Not like, legal laws. Physical laws. Laws of existence."
 
-"But don't you control those kind of laws? Or don't some of the others like you have that power?"
+"But don't you control those kind of laws? Or don't some of the others
+like you have that power?"
 
-DAMN. IT. Note to self: never create worlds that can contain anything capable of making a good point.
+DAMN. IT. Note to self: never create worlds that can contain anything
+capable of making a good point.
 
-"I support we kind of do? But if I change those laws for you, I have to change them for everyone, and I don't think everyone wants to be a shirt. Or pants. Or a shoe. Much less to derive gratification from being any of those."
+"I support we kind of do? But if I change those laws for you, I have
+to change them for everyone, and I don't think everyone wants to be a
+shirt. Or pants. Or a shoe. Much less to derive gratification from
+being any of those."
 
-"Why wouldn't other people want to be shirts? There's so many possibilities. I would be a continual soft hug. I would adorn the wearer and make them look nice. I would absorb their sweat."
+"Why wouldn't other people want to be shirts? There's so many
+possibilities. I would be a continual soft hug. I would adorn the
+wearer and make them look nice. I would absorb their sweat."
 
 "We didn't give you sweat glands. How would you even pull that off?"
 
-"I'd find a way. We've got our own tools down here too, you know. They're just not powerful enough to let me be a shirt."
+"I'd find a way. We've got our own tools down here too, you know.
+They're just not powerful enough to let me be a shirt."
 
-"Yeah there's a reason for that. What about if you tried to... Ugh, is there even a verb for this? What if you tried to... shirt someone and they didn't know you were a living shirt or whatever it is you're asking for here. Think about the security issues."
+"Yeah there's a reason for that. What about if you tried to... Ugh, is
+there even a verb for this? What if you tried to... shirt someone and
+they didn't know you were a living shirt or whatever it is you're
+asking for here. Think about the security issues."
 
 "I think it'd be pretty obvious 'cause I'd be talking."
 
-"Oh so you want to be a TALKING shirt? Anything else on this list of demands?"
+"Oh so you want to be a TALKING shirt? Anything else on this list of
+demands?"
 
 "Ability to change cloth type? I'd want to stay current with the trends."
 
-"Forget I asked. And besides, not everyon... everyshirt would talk. We already have to deal with enough chaos around here without adding 'Non-consensual shirtings' to our list."
+"Forget I asked. And besides, not everyon... everyshirt would talk. We
+already have to deal with enough chaos around here without adding
+'Non-consensual shirtings' to our list."
 
-"Hey, you're the one building this world. You wanted feedback on how to do that, and I'm giving it to you."
+"Hey, you're the one building this world. You wanted feedback on how
+to do that, and I'm giving it to you."
 
 "You are the worst focus group."
 
 "You randomly asked the first person you saw. Blame fate, not me."
 
-A quiet voice pops up from a few yards, or miles, over. Scale is difficult when you're looking down from above.
+A quiet voice pops up from a few yards, or miles, over. Scale is
+difficult when you're looking down from above.
 
 "If they get to be a shirt can I be a cube?"
 
@@ -84,12 +132,13 @@ Fuck.
 The preceding story actually happened.
 
 Sure, it was in the context of the Second Life virtual world, and the
-narrator was less god and more employee, but the events happened
+narrator (me) was less god and more employee, but the events happened
 basically as stated. Someone really wanted to be a shirt, and it
-couldn't happen. This was despite the employee having the ability to
-control the world, albeit in a manner limited by software development
-time, project specifications, and other obstacles both gods and
-engineers have to deal with.
+couldn't happen. This was despite me (as a software engineer who,
+before being hired, had made real life sex toys work with Second Life)
+having the ability to control the world, albeit in a manner limited by
+software development time, project specifications, and other obstacles
+both gods and engineers have to deal with.
 
 There are a lot of people out there that want to be shirts, at least,
 in the terms of this horribly tortured metaphor. They've bought a sex
@@ -98,8 +147,9 @@ them for some reason, or the content isn't to their liking. Buttplug
 (the software, not the sex toy genre) was created for that situation.
 
 Buttplug is nothing without interface applications. The only real
-function of Buttplug is make it easy to talk to sex toys. There has to
-be something to tell Buttplug what to say.
+function of Buttplug is make it easy for developers to get computers
+to talk to sex toys. The software those developers make will tell
+Buttplug what to say to the sex toys.
 
 Interface applications are the link between users and Buttplug,
 establishing the functionality the user was missing. Application
@@ -118,19 +168,19 @@ about specific application needs can be informed.
 
 There are risks in building, releasing, and using software with the
 kinds of contexts that are inherent in Buttplug. This document is what
-we've learned so far about sex toy control and interface design, and
-how to apply that when using or developing for Buttplug. We aren't
-perfect, neither are other developers, nor are users. In the end,
-things will sometimes go wrong. When that happens, we'll add it to
-this document for all to learn from.
+I've learned so far about sex toy control and interface design, and
+how to apply that when using or developing for Buttplug. It contains
+the lessons I've learned over the years, and will be the home for
+lessons learned in the future.
 
 ** Why Do I Need You To Tell Me Where My Butt Is
 
-Hi. I'm Kyle Machulis. I run metafetish.com, and am lead architect of
-Buttplug. Since 2004, I've been research and blogging about sex tech,
-both commercial and DIY. I've followed online communities, talked to
-hundreds of people involved in many different activities, fetishes,
-and interests, and built many experiments to try to figure out.
+Hi. I'm Kyle Machulis, lead architect of Buttplug. Since 2004, I've
+been research and blogging about sex tech, both commercial and DIY, on
+metafetish.com. I've followed online communities, talked to hundreds
+of people involved in many different activities, fetishes, and
+interests, and built many experiments to try to figure out if/how/why
+technology will/won't work in situations presented to me.
 
 The information presented here comes from over a decade of my amateur
 research on the sex technology field, from the engineering and user
@@ -156,7 +206,7 @@ stories and examples presented are anecdotal at best, and complete
 fabrications at worst.
 
 Building this project has been a weird, great, weird journey. I hope
-Buttplug helps you with whatever your needs may be.
+Buttplug helps you with whatever your wants and needs may be.
 
 * Buttplug Ethics
 ** Wait This Doesn't Sound Technical